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I read to much! A POEM!! by Dreamchild on 6 March 2003 10:30pm
 
This was inspired while I was reading Hemmingways Chair my husband kept complaining every time he turned around I had my nose stuck in a book.so this came out...
I read,
to much people say.
So much that,
that life passes me by,
Yet there is so much life,
in pages.
In lands unknown,
people non-exesistant.
Love and Pain,
expressed through words.
Someone elses,
dreams.
Thoughts and desires,
fade away,
Into books,
bound and endless,
This world,
in words on paper.

I know it sucks but be kind please be honest but kind so"What do You Think"
lol,
Beth
 
Re: I read to much! A POEM!! by Sophie-Louise on 7 March 2003 12:10am
 
I love it beth, it really expresses how you feel about books!!! It doesn't suck at all!!! Although i do think the lines are split too much. Try linking the phrases more......like using enjambent in the lines of the poem.

Love Sophie-Lou
xxx
 
Re: I read to much! A POEM!! by Kristine on 7 March 2003 12:41am
 
Actully, I quite like it! You've displyed some talent there :)
 
Re: I read to much! A POEM!! by Rusted on 7 March 2003 8:25am
 
The emotion and expression was very good! Sophie-Lou does have a good point, though. (Actually, ditching superfluous commas would probably fix that.) But mechanicals are easy things to fix, such as your 'to' in the beginning - it should actually be spelled 'too' in that instance.)

But definitely a good start! Don't stop reading those books!

~Mary
/English major mode off ;O)
 
Re: I read to much! A POEM!! by Tracy on 7 March 2003 8:48am
 
thats cute!! i'm the same way! always have my nose stuck in a book...always been way past my reading level when i was a kid...lol
 
Re: I read to much! A POEM!! by Dreamchild on 7 March 2003 6:33pm
 
thankyou all you are very kinda and gave some great contructive critsion(sorry can't spell agian today)
but thank you it means a lot to me..
lol,
Beth
 
Re: I read to much! A POEM!! by Rusted on 9 March 2003 6:04am
 
You may not have been able to "spell again today", but that has to be the most creative spelling of "criticism" (which is what I assume is what you were trying to spell) I've ever seen! LOL! :O)

Just remember, Shakespeare never cared about how he spelled things... 8O)

~Mary
 



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